Personally, I liked the story but not the underlying message that you can treat a BBW like shit because she has to take what she can get. That was degrading and not in the sexy way some BDSM stories are told. I am a big person so I am biased. On the other hand, you did continue to refer to how talented and appreciated she was. I think it all came off a little convoluted which I know for some will work, as it comes off as inner conflict/turmoil.

I like the idea of a business traveler who has a favorite "go to" girl when he reaches different cities. Maybe you could make this a series??? MFF in Austin, Boi in Philadelphia, Sub in Boston, Mistress in Miami...

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